Little Bo Peep Revised

Last night I had my writing group meeting, we had a great group of writers and our prompt was to rewrite a fairytale, basically.  So here was mine.  I am pretty proud of myself for banging this out.
I am posting the original first, since most of us and probably you too, have not heard the full horrific original story.

Prompt:  Use a nursery rhyme character, and rewrite the story with that character’s point of view.
Little Bo Peep story
Little Bo peep has lost her sheep
And doesn't know where to find them.
Leave them alone and they'll come home,
Bringing their tails behind them.
Little Bo peep fell fast asleep
And dreamt she heard them bleating,
But when she awoke, she found it a joke,
For they were all still fleeting.
Then up she took her little crook
Determined for to find them.
She found them indeed, but it made her heart bleed,
For they left their tails behind them.
It happened one day, as Bo peep did stray
Into a meadow hard by,
There she espied their tails side by side
All hung on a tree to dry.
She heaved a sigh, and wiped her eye,
And over the hillocks went rambling,
And tried what she could,
As a shepherdess should,
To tack again each to its lambkin.

My version:

Little Bo Peep

Little Bo Peep hated sheep,
she really couldn’t stand them,
their fur was rough and tough and smelly
their legs too skinny and weak,
and at night when Peep couldn’t sleep
she wouldn’t dare count sheep.
Little Bo Peep despised her sheep,
she treated them quite unfairly,
while other animals slept in the barn
THEY slept out on the fairway.
Oh you’re good for nothing,
where has all this hatred come from?
Surely it runs too deep.
Little Bo Peep don’t judge your sheep
as you may be judged likewise,
sheep may have dirt but they never will hurt
their shepherdess they NEVER despise.
Little Bo Peep forgive your sheep
they only want your kindness,
treat them as you would your own
and their company may be fondest.



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